These points may be good basic ideas, but to develop your paragraph effectively, you would need to include specific examples and details. So, rather than packing one body paragraph with several broad, vague ideas, you could use each of our three earlier ideas as the main idea in three separate body paragraphs and develop each of those paragraphs fully with specific details and examples.
In order to write a well-developed body paragraph on the topic of our first idea - money is important, and children should know that - brainstorm specific details to support your point. For example, you might explain that children who learn to manage money well when they're young tend to be better with money as adults; children might benefit from earning money for doing chores so that they develop a good work ethic early; and when children learn about money, they tend to become more appreciative for what they have, and they may learn the importance of charitable giving at a young age.
Achieving Unity in Body Paragraphs
We know that the word unity has to do with things being joined together, and that meaning applies to essay writing, too. For a body paragraph to be unified, all of the sentences in that paragraph should stick to the main idea expressed in the topic sentence. Just like a couple won't be very happy or successful if each of them has very different ideas about the nature of the relationship, your body paragraphs won't succeed if they feature a lot of ideas that don't go together.
To achieve unity, you want to avoid any random, off-point ideas. Even an idea that seems to be sort of connected to the main idea of your body paragraph may be taking you off track if it doesn't directly support or relate to your topic sentence. For example, if you're writing a body paragraph with the main idea that children must learn about saving money, then each of your sentences in that paragraph must support that main idea. So, you can explain that children can benefit from contributing money to their own college funds early on and children can learn that it's good to save up for one really nice thing rather than frittering away their money on meaningless things. However, your body paragraph won't be unified - and you'll lose points - if you mention that many families choose to rent homes rather than buy so that they don't have to save up for a large down payment.
Sure, this last point is sort of related to our main idea, in a roundabout way. We're still talking about the issue of saving money, and young kids are part of families. But it's too big of a stretch, and if you include it in your body paragraph about the importance of kids learning about saving money, your paragraph will stay unified for just about as long as that couple from earlier.
Achieving Coherence in Body Paragraphs
You may wake up some mornings knowing that until you get some caffeine into your system, you'll be walking around in a foggy cloud of confusion. After that first cup of coffee, things may finally start making sense. Your essay body paragraphs need to make sense, too. To achieve coherence, a paragraph should be clear and logical, with sentences that flow together well.
So if you have sentences that don't seem to be in the right order, or your body paragraph lacks transitional sentences so that the reader can't see how the ideas relate to one another, your paragraph will lack coherence. Also, your teacher will want to throw his chair through a window after struggling to decipher the meaning of your paragraph.
For example, if you're writing a body paragraph on the main idea that children should learn not to spend too much in one place, you'll want to present your supporting ideas in a logical, clear way in order to achieve coherence. You might write about a specific example. Let's say you relate the story about your young child, who spent all of his allowance at once, and then was pretty unhappy to realize he couldn't afford anything else that he wanted or needed for the next month.
To have a coherent body paragraph, you would need to present the points of this story in a logical order, first explaining your main point that children should learn not to spend too much in one place, and then following with a chronological, clear order. You could explain that your son frittered his money away and then couldn't do fun things with his friends later. You might tie things up at the end of the paragraph with the argument that when kids learn this valuable lesson when they're young, they'll be more likely to be responsible spenders as adults.
If you jumbled your story up, explaining first that your son was mad that he couldn't go to the arcade with friends, and then backing up to explain that he had blown his allowance on way too many jellybeans the week before, and only then remembering that you needed to introduce your main point about kids not spending everything in one place, your paragraph would be messy and incoherent. Also, your teacher would have a broken window and nowhere to sit! So, remember to keep your ideas clear and coherent.
Lesson Summary
Some essays come across like waking nightmares for the teachers who read them. But you can keep the body paragraphs in your essay from being a horrifying mess by keeping three basic principles in mind.
- You should write well-developed body paragraphs that use supporting details and examples. Strive for unified body paragraphs in which all of the sentences in each paragraph stick to the main idea expressed in the topic sentence.
- You should present coherent body paragraphs that feature clear, logical sentences that flow together well. You can also ensure coherence by using transitional sentences between your points and ordering your points in ways that make sense.
- Use chronological order when you relate a story, and don't back up and start adding details at one point in a paragraph when you should have included them earlier.
By producing well-crafted body paragraphs in your essays, you'll help preserve your readers' sanity and earn high scores.